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Schenker’s article “Smart House, in 1969 establishes that, in the future, houses willnetworked facilitating people’s life. Electronic devices will be connected tointernet and will have special chips to control different activities like, housework, communications, bills or people’s social life. The disadvantages of a networkedhome do not seem to be significant. People will have to pay extra dollars for extra chips, the internet connection and security measures to protect the system againstcyber pirating. The maintenance will not be afforded by the people, because theservices will repair themselves. Schenker concludes that, the money that people can spend will not be much considering all the benefits of a smart house.
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This study went through over 1,600 marginal and end comments written on 110 first drafts of essays by 47 university advanced ESL students, considering the pragmatic goals for linguistic features of each comment. After this, drafts of each essay were examined to observe its influence on the first draft commentary on the students’ revisions and assess whether the changes that were made improved the essays. The author thinks that a really significant proportion of the comments led to student revision, and there were particular types and forms of more helpful commentary than others. The final results, suggest several implications for writing instruction and for future studies on a vital but neglected topic.
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Schenker’s article “Smart House, in 1969 establishes that, in the future, houses willnetworked facilitating people’s life. Electronic devices will be connected tointernet and will have special chips to control different activities like, housework, communications, bills or people’s social life. The disadvantages of a networkedhome do not seem to be significant. People will have to pay extra dollars for extra chips, the internet connection and security measures to protect the system againstcyber pirating. The maintenance will not be afforded by the people, because theservices will repair themselves. Schenker concludes that, the money that people can spend will not be much considering all the benefits of a smart house.
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This study went through over 1,600 marginal and end comments written on 110 first drafts of essays by 47 university advanced ESL students, considering the pragmatic goals for linguistic features of each comment. After this, drafts of each essay were examined to observe its influence on the first draft commentary on the students’ revisions and assess whether the changes that were made improved the essays. The author thinks that a really significant proportion of the comments led to student revision, and there were particular types and forms of more helpful commentary than others. The final results, suggest several implications for writing instruction and for future studies on a vital but neglected topic.
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Great summary! of course you could delete the intensifiers such as "really".
ResponderEliminarDear Andrea,
ResponderEliminarWillnetworked facilitating people's life? Or will network...?
You have to be carefull when typing as there are some words which are not separated.
Good.